The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The line chart illustrates how the costs of Copper, Nickel and Zinc changed every month in 2014.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the average difference in the costs of the metals decreased dramatically by the end of the duration.
Although
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three metals experienced a fluctuation in prices during the mentioned period. Regarding Nickel, the percentage of the shift change in the validity of Nickel in January was 6%,
although
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there was a plunge in prices and the change of Nickel’s cost reached a low of roughly -3% in June. After that, it witnessed a fluctuation in changes to stand at 1% in December. As for Copper and Zink,
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, the latter had the lowest modification at the first of the period, the proportion underwent a growth of 2% by February and there was a gradual decline in changes in the prices to stand at approximately 2%. The former decreased from almost 2% to 1.5%.
In other words
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, the figure for it was almost unchanged, after some fluctuations during the studied duration.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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