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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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It is known that most people are passionate about new and stylish
clothes
 .
Clothes
 are very important in our life .
This
 is the main part of our image , which we need every day . When we see a
person
 for the first time , the first thing we pay attention to is clothing . A
person
 dressed neatly
,
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will make a greater impression on us than someone who is sloppy . Why do you think
this
 is the case ? Well , I think each
person
 gets the opportunity to express himself by wearing what he likes , he demonstrates his mood ,
hobbies
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 .
For example
 , sometimes , by clothing or the style chosen by a
person
 , you can determine the type of
his
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professional activity . Is
this
 a good thing or a bad thing ? For me ,
clothes
 are a reflection of a
person
 . It shows us current trends and beauty standards . Fashion changes quickly , and what was popular yesterday may be outdated today .
However
 , clothing not only follows fashion trends
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but can
also
 be
as
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an expression of our personality . In conclusion , I think , that every
person
 can have his own style and look unique . He should choose
clothes
according to
 his taste , age , job and character . But you
also
 should not pay all your attention only how to dress
beautiful
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, because
clothes
 are only a reflection of appearance , not the soul .
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