Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
One of the social concerns today relates to reducing
traffic
accidents
. While
it is widely believed that strict punishments for driving offences
are the key to reducing traffic
accidents
, others believe measures
would be more effective in improving road
safety
. In my opinion, measures
would
be more effective in improving Correct pronoun usage
that would
road
safety
will be nice for everyone
On the one hand, it is argued that strict punishments for driving offences
are the key to reducing traffic
accidents
. The main reason is that people
will afair loss
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lose
money
then
not driving offences
. It is also
possible to say that people
don’t like to loss
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lose
money
for driving offences
. One good illustration of this
is loss
money
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of money
this
month they don’t have many
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much
money
, when they loss
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lose
money
about strict punishments they will so sad . Another reason is making people
worry when driving For example
, they are
often Unnecessary verb
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thingking
and Correct your spelling
thinking
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worrying
working
worring
when driving
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worry
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed by others that measures
would be more effective in improving road
safety
. People
often have this
opinion because they like refer
to freedom A second point is Add the particle
to refer
that
making Correct word choice
apply
people
comfortable when driving. A particularly good example here is they will confidence
and comfortable when driving Replace the word
confident
then
reducing traffic
accidents
In conclusion, I think we have many types and many measures
. Personally, I tend to believe that measures
would be more effective in improving road
safety
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite