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Compare the amount of electricity generated in Scotland by energy source for 29 years ago and last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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According to
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 the figure, the amount of electricity generated by each
energy
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 source
last
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year
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 and the previous two decades in Scotland is revealed. It can be clearly seen that the major
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 source in
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periods
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 was coal at 41. 4% twenty years ago, and 32. 7% for
last
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;
whereas
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 oil and
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 storage accounted for the smallest proportion in
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periods
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 (between 2. 1% and 4% respectively). The highest drop was in the usage
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 coal and oil. The amount of oil halved
last
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, and coal declined by more than 8%. Roughly one-fifth of
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 was gained through gas in
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. Hydro natural flow remains
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 same level at approximately 8%. Other renewable sources almost doubled
last
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 (from 2. 8% to 5. 1%);
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 another significant source
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nuclear
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 climbs from 19. 6% to 26. 4%. In conclusion, it is obvious that the Scottish mainly relied on coal, gas, and nuclear power in
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. The usage of renewable energies maintains stability at around 15%.
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