The graph below shows the average monthly chnage in the prices of three metal during 2014.

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The provided line graph compares the mean

price

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alternation of three metals (copper,

nickel

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, and zinc) in each month of the year 2014.

Overall

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nickel

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prices varied very much in 12 months

whereas

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zinc prices maintained almost a flat trend.

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with,

while

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the cost of

nickel

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dramatically switched to 5% in March from January, it followed a steady trend till May 2014. But after that, the

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had changed significantly in July after just over 3.5% cost rotation. Though the

price

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did not alter in July, August, September, and December, the rotation was three per cent from October to November. Interestingly, the charges of zinc

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share an identical curve to the

nickel

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, the charges of copper fluctuated very less compared to other two metals. Though the

price

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did not change at all from July to September and October to November, the largest variation was a little above 1.5% from June to July.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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The graph below shows the average monthly chnage in the prices of three metal during 2014.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In many countries, the gap between the rich and the poor is widening. What problems does this cause and what solutions can you suggest?

More and more people are migrating to cities to in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for every one?