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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.
Provided graphs illustrate the level of unemployment in rural and urban
areas
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 in the
year
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 2012.
Overall
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, the level of unemployment decreased in rural regions from 6.5% to 5%,
whereas
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 increased in urban
areas
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 from 2% to nearly 5% by the end of the
year
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. The non-working population surged steadily from 2 to 4 per cent by the second quarter of the
year
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.
In contrast
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, the percentage in the rural
areas
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 showed a steep decrease from 6 to approximately 4.5 per cent by the mid of the
year
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. Meanwhile,
this
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 trend reversed back in the later quarter and the percentage of the unemployed population in the urban
areas
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 fell back to 2 per cent as at the start of the
year
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 and jobless people elevated to 5.5 in regional
areas
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. Later by the fourth , quarter the number of citizens without earnings increased drastically to 5% in cities and remained relatively steady in the countryside.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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