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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals are of the view that
people
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 who engage in physical jobs are to be paid equally as scholars who have high degrees. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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 statement and I will elaborate
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 on my reasons and give some examples to support it.
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people
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 may not find the need to pursue higher education when they're paid equally with
people
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 who don't have certificates.
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, a survey conducted in 2022 in Africa showed that individuals who worked before university always regret furthering their
career
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 since they were paid well.
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, when they equally earn as a master holder
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 they will be reluctant in being educated since they will get the same money as a master holder. 
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, there will be misunderstanding among workers on who is to be paid what amount of money.
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, some
jobs
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job
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 categories may need educated workers and not just
people
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 physically fit for it.
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, a hospital may need a trained doctor and that doctor cannot be paid the same salary as the cleaner because the job doctors do still do not match up to a person who does physical work.
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, they cannot take the same salary
at the end
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 of the working period. In conclusion, a person who does a physical job and a certificate holder all play a great role in their job description and
deserves
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 to be paid well. In my opinion, I disagree with the idea of paying degree holders equally as
people
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 who
does
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 physical
labor
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labour
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 because they will feel reluctant in going to school and there will be misunderstanding among workers.
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