Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some

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hold the idea that everyone should get equal punishment for their crimes.

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others believe that before reaching a final verdict one should always listen to their side of the story . What were the conditions and events which

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them to do so? I will explain both viewpoints in forthcoming paragraphs,

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I agree with the latter ones. A predominant reason why

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suggest equality is

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order to improve law and order situations and easy justice , Punishment should be equal for the rich and poor . Whenever there is any review involved some

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might use

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as a loophole in the system .

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will help them trick the system .

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, there is a policy of pre-arrest bail which politicians use frequently .

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helps them to avoid lockup.

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and

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to other countries .

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, in order to provide justice there should zero

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policy . Many

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think that listening to background events and

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deciding on punishment can stop many freshers

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path. Counselling and

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assistance can stop them from being a criminal.

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, recently a piece of news was published in the media that a father of 4 hungry children commits a robbery .

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the unavailability of daily wage work, he stole fruits and cash to buy food items for his kids

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food for him but

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arranged a permanent job for him .

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shows a little sympathy can improve society.

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can be reiterated that

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there are always pros and cons related to both views but continuous revision of justice rules can identify and remove

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from the system . Having said that

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society as well .

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task response

Expand on the arguments for and against fixed punishments and considering individual circumstances. Your essay should provide a clear and balanced discussion of both viewpoints.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be more explicit. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph contributes to the overall coherence of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

308 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fixed punishments
consistency
predictability
deter crime
potential offenders
streamline
judicial process
bias
corruption
complexity
human behavior
circumstances
justice system
intent
remorse
socio-economic background
rehabilitate offenders
recidivism rates
flexible punishment systems
inconsistencies
perceived injustices
public trust

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