The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables ,sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables ,sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the variation
of
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in
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the cost
for
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of
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fresh fruits and
vegetables
, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
Overall
, all the costs experienced an upward trend. But, fresh fruits and
vegetables
had risen over the
others
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other
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items.
Moreover
, sugar and sweets, consumer price
index
and carbonated drinks showed
similarly
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ascent
between
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in
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the
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apply
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value in three
decade
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decades
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. Starting from 1979, fresh fruit and
vegetables
rose steadily (60 to 330) until 2009.
In
addition
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fresh fruits and
vegetables
become the highest product because the price had grown more than 250% in 30 years, two times more than the others. Even though was the only category that raised above that consumer-price
index
.
Similarly
, with
a
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upward trend: sugar and sweets, consumer-price
index
and carbonated water rose around 150% since 1970 when the amount of
the
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prices
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price
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of all products
was
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were
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equal.
Although
, the two not essentials products had maintained under the consumer-price
index
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables, index with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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