The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables ,sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the variation
of
the cost Change preposition
in
for
fresh fruits and Change preposition
of
vegetables
, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
Overall
, all the costs experienced an upward trend. But, fresh fruits and vegetables
had risen over the others
items. Correct quantifier usage
other
Moreover
, sugar and sweets, consumer price index
and carbonated drinks showed similarly
ascent Change the word
similar
between
Change preposition
in
the
value in three Correct article usage
apply
decade
.
Starting from 1979, fresh fruit and Change to a plural noun
decades
vegetables
rose steadily (60 to 330) until 2009. In
addition
fresh fruits and Add a comma
,addition
vegetables
become the highest product because the price had grown more than 250% in 30 years, two times more than the others. Even though was the only category that raised above that consumer-price index
.
Similarly
, with a
upward trend: sugar and sweets, consumer-price Change the article
an
index
and carbonated water rose around 150% since 1970 when the amount of the
Correct article usage
apply
prices
of all products Fix the agreement mistake
price
was
equal. Change the verb form
were
Although
, the two not essentials products had maintained under the consumer-price index
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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