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Ielts Simon: Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is important to achieve economic
development
 but
on the other hand
, it is
also
 needed to achieve other improvements equally
such
 as science, health, and many more. Economic
progress
 is very much helpful because if
people
 of a
nation
 will get more income that will help them to reduce poorly. As
nation
people
 will be out of a poor line
then
 it will be easy for the government. If
people
 will have money
then
 it will be easy for them to get
education
, food, and many more. For ,example if the
nation
 will only
grows
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 in economic ways that will not help other factors. Some communities think that other
types
 of
progress
 are equally important for a
country
 because if a
country
 will not have other
progress
then
 there will be no use of money. Countries should
also
progress
 in
education
, health, clothes, transportation, roads, airways, import, export, waterways and many more. For ,example if the
country
 will
progress
 in all
types
 of ways
then
 not only food,
education
 and more but
also
 it will grow with all
types
 of
progress
. Not only is economic
development
is
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needed but
also
 other
development
 is needed
such
 as GDP, and many more. A
nation
 should
also
 focus on
education
 and more. If a
nation
 has only
progress
 in economics
then
 that
progress
 will be called 50%
development
 only. So, countries should not focus on economic
progress
 but should
also
 work on all
types
 of growth which can make a
country
 a progressive
country
 and help their
people
 to live an easy and happy lifestyle.
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