IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem.What are the causes of this and wha actions can be taken to solve this problem?

#cities #towns #world #volume #traffic #wha #actions
It is irrefutable that a high number of traffic is one of the major issues in most of the big cities and towns all over the planet earth. There are numerous reasons for
this
 problem. In the following paragraphs, I will throw some light on both of these notions and discuss some of the causes and solutions of
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, the increased number of private cars is one of the main causes of the high volume of congestion. It is easy to buy a vehicle because of bank loan schemes and instalment payments and people are buying too many of them.
Furthermore
, in
this
 modern era, everyone has a hectic and busy schedule. Owing to the insufficient availability of public transport, individuals are disinclined to utilize local transportation services. The population do not want to waste their time waiting and travelling on public transport.
For example
, in Australia, train services are not good, and people waste two hours waiting for one hour distance. To tackle
this
 issue, several measures can be implemented.
Firstly
, the government should encourage society to use local transport services. The government should arrange webinars to aware people.
Secondly
, if the authority provides cheaper travelling fares, the community will opt to travel by buses and trains, rather than using their own vehicles.
Last
 but not least, the authority should take some steps to improve the road system as well.
To conclude
,
although
 modern cities face a variety of problems
due to
 gridlock, these problems are not insurmountable. To solve
this
 issue, it is the government's responsibility to tackle these issues, and they should begin by considering some of the solutions proposed above.
Submitted by simran31788 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: