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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
show
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 the data for
foreign
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the foreign
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 visitor who visit 3
diffrent
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different
areas
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 in
Europe
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 between
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year
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 1987 to 2007.
According to
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 the
date
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data
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 given to us by the graph ,it can be seen that there are 3 main
areas
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 visited by these
non-european
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non-European
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 visitors which
is
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 the coastal
areas
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 , the mountains and the lakes . Between the
year
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 1987 to
1997
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,1997
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 the most visited
areas
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 of
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europe
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Europe
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 by oversea
toursit
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tourists
was
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were
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 the coastal
areas
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 ,the lake
areas
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 and the mountains respectively . But in the
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year
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years
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 1997 and 2002 , the
number
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 of
people
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visited
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who visited
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 the lakes overtake the most
visted
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visited
 place in
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europe
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Europe
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 from the
costal
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coastal
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 area .The
number
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 of
people
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visited
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visiting
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 the lakes area
peak
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 at
estimately
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estimated
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 around 75
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thousans
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thousand
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people
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 in
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year
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the year
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 2002 ,before delined down to around 50
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thousans
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thousand
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people
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 in
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year
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the year
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 2007. Meanwhile ,the
vistor
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visitor
number
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of
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in
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 the
montain
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mountain
areas
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 of
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europe
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Europe
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was
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stagnant only
inreased
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increased
 by
aroud
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around
 10
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thousans
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thousand
thousands
people
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 between 1987 and 2007 .
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 , the
number
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 of
traveler
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travelers
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 who visited the
costal
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coastal
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 area
between
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in
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 the same period increased by around 30
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thousans
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thousand
thousands
people
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 and 40
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thousans
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thousand
thousands
people
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 for the lake
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areas
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area's
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 visitor
number
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 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, europe, year, number, people, thousans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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