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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Free
Health
 Services should be offered in every country. The Benefits of Free
Health
Care
outweigths
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outweighs
outweigh
 the negatives, as wide parts of society can be
positivly
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positively
 affected. Even if not the most recent medical treatments can be offered, more
people
 can be offered
health
 benefits. Cutting-edge science often only affects a small percentage of the public in the beginning and is
hence
 ineffective. The Costs are often cited as the main reason, why free
health
care
 is not
feasable
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feasible
, but it is often forgotten that in free
health
 ,
care
 preventative measures are
also
 included. Preventative measures are often more easily available,
cost effective
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 and help to find problems before they become a serious
health
 concern. Moreso the Question of Free
Health
Care
 is a question of Wealth Equality. Free
health
care
 ensures that
someones
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 income does not dictate the quality of
Health
Care
 that can be offered to them. The moment that personal
health
 costs do not lead to private
insolvence
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insolvency
, is a huge burden take of each individual. Mental
Health
 is
therefore
 improved greatly as a byproduct of free
health
care
.
Ofcourse
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Of course
people
 who can afford the newest medical treatment will not be able to get it, because resources were not made available to offer these services. Admittedly
people
 who need new treatments because their sickness does not respond to current treatment should be able to get these treatments. To
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,
while
 small amounts of
people
 will lose out on treatment that could benefit them, the positive effects it can have on society as a whole
outweights
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outweigh
 their individual needs.
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