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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The graph and table provide information about the number of yearly visits to Australia by overseas residents and the visitor's origin.
Overall
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, year by year Australia's visitor
count
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 has been increasing.
In contrast
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, Japan has the highest rate of travellers to visit. In 1975, the total number of visitors to Australia was 9
million
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 , where the Japanese people hold the maximum
count
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 of travellers followed by South Korea , with a rate of approximately 3.2 and 2.9
million
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.
While
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 in Europe , the range was 1.1
million
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 and in the rest of the countries like Britain, the USA and China was below 0.9 . Moving to 1985, the visitor
count
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 has been increased to 50% and by 1995 the
count
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 reached 24
million
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. By the end of 2005, the traveller range has been increased to 31million. In
this
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 period
also
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 in Japan , South Korea and
Europe
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,Europe
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 people have travelled a lot compared to other countries, with the range of 12.0,9.1 and 4.5
million
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.But
this
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 year, the Britain and the USA
count
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 have improved by 2% and 1%.
Whereas
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 , China has a slight growth with 0.8
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words count, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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