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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010

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The map shows how the ground floor of the museum changed from 1990 to 2010. There was made several changes ,but the most important alteration was
produced
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made
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 in the northern part of
area
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the area
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, where
was introduced a lift ,
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a lift was introduced;
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meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the exit stairs remained unchanged after the renovation.
According to
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 the plans, the statue was transferred to the centre and the entrance was extended in size. Another important change has been made to the Gift shop. It became a Cafe and Gift shop by doubling in dimension.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 the Archaeology gallery was divided
in
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into
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 two different rooms as a
children
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children's
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 interactive zone and
poster
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a poster
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 display area.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the reception counter ,situated in the left-hand
corner
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 was set up diagonally towards the centre.
On the other hand
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, the Local history room, museum office and natural history room remained the same. Taken as a whole, the ground floor of the museum endured a number of major alterations
since
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from
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 1990
till
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to
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 2010.

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coherence and cohesion
Write more short and clear sentences. Some parts are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like 'also', 'while', 'in 2010', and 'by contrast'.
coherence and cohesion
Group changes by area, for example north, centre, and east side. This will make the report easier to read.
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Check grammar in key sentences. For example, say 'There were several changes' and 'a lift was added'.
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Make the overview more clear. Say the biggest changes in one simple sentence.
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Include all main changes, but avoid long or unclear phrases.
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You gave a clear overview of the main changes.
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You mentioned many key changes, like the lift, cafe and gift shop, and the new rooms.
coherence and cohesion
The report has an introduction, body, and ending.
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You used some linking words, like 'Furthermore' and 'On the other hand'.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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