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Some people say that rich countries should assist poor countries by sharing their wealth. Others say that it is the responsibility of the governments of poor countries to take care of their own people. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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These days, the gap between rich
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 and poor
countries
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 is becoming greater than ever.
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this
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 social situation, there are conflicting views on whether rich
countries
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 should
support
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 poor
countries
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 by sharing their wealth or whether it's up to the government to take care of their citizens. Both sides have advantages and disadvantages. But personally, I do agree that rich
countries
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 should provide
support
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 to poor
countries
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. First of all, we should take a look at the side opposed to rich
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' help. Actually,
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 the poorness of the country doesn't come from other rich
countries
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. Now we are not in an era
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 as the 19th century when conquering and taking away resources and people was natural. Most of the
countries
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 have their own rights,
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 their economic rights. In short, it is not the responsibility of other
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 anymore.
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, it is the government who knows the reason for the scarcity of money.
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, maybe the abuse of power can be the main cause of poverty. Usually, it is not surprising to see some political issues in these
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. In
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 case, helping them with money will never solve the fundamental problem. It is not even a resolution, it just makes the government delay finding the solution and makes the citizens do a coup, which makes the situation even worse.
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, in the long run, supportive relationships between
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 can help each other. Usually, developed
countries
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 are rich enough to
support
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 developing
countries
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, which are still suffering from the poor. If developed
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support
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 them with money and technology, they can provide human & natural resources
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. Citizens from poor
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 who are educated with the assistance of developed
countries
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 will become a great human resource, assisting both
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. In conclusion, I believe that the interaction between
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 will bring various positive impacts and lead to a new global trend. The international network made by
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 relationship will eventually make international business involving many
countries
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, which will actually bring us international wealth.
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