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Playing a game is fun only when you win. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It is believed that people enjoy playing games only whenever they win all the games.I agree with
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 statement but to some certain extent which I would discuss
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 essay. On the one hand,only winning makes a
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 enjoyable.
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, winning a
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 gives an output of one's hard work.Since players keep on practising many hours a day for winning and when athletes win a
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 it feels them proud of working hard.
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, it's the feeling of pride which makes a
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 interesting.
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, winning brings fame.As winning a
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 makes a person popular among competitors and the audience
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 their achievements in the
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.
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,
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 feeling gives a personal sense of joy
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, losing a
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 does not make it boring. First of all, it depends upon the purpose which makes a
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 interesting .As, if a person is playing a
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 for physical fitness
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 the target is not winning a
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 it is a healthy life and winning or losing does not matters in
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 situation.
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, losing a
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 gives tells a person`s weaknesses and the place where the athlete is lacking.So, players can focus on their mistakes and
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 can improve their
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also
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. To recapitulate, I think that enjoying does not depend on winning or losing a
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.
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, it depends on the reason for which the player is playing a
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.Indeed winning is
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 important for enjoying a
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 but it is
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 a fact that if some win
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 some others lose. So athletes should not lack interest in losing they should focus on working hard.
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