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Playing a game is fun only when you win. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It is believed that people enjoy playing games only whenever they win all the games.I agree with
this
 statement but to some certain extent which I would discuss
further
 in
this
 essay. On the one hand,only winning makes a
game
 enjoyable.
Firstly
, winning a
game
 gives an output of one's hard work.Since players keep on practising many hours a day for winning and when athletes win a
game
 it feels them proud of working hard.
Moreover
, it's the feeling of pride which makes a
game
 interesting.
Secondly
, winning brings fame.As winning a
game
 makes a person popular among competitors and the audience
due to
 their achievements in the
game
.
However
,
this
 feeling gives a personal sense of joy
also
.
On the other hand
, losing a
game
 does not make it boring. First of all, it depends upon the purpose which makes a
game
 interesting .As, if a person is playing a
game
 for physical fitness
then
 the target is not winning a
game
 it is a healthy life and winning or losing does not matters in
this
 situation.
Furthermore
, losing a
game
 gives tells a person`s weaknesses and the place where the athlete is lacking.So, players can focus on their mistakes and
this
 can improve their
game
also
. To recapitulate, I think that enjoying does not depend on winning or losing a
game
.
However
, it depends on the reason for which the player is playing a
game
.Indeed winning is
also
 important for enjoying a
game
 but it is
also
 a fact that if some win
then
 some others lose. So athletes should not lack interest in losing they should focus on working hard.
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