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Rich countries often give money to poreer countries, but it does not solve their problem. Therefore, developed countries should not provide financial aid to poor countries, but other types of aid .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,many changes are happening around the world.
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, many
countries
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 are developing because of technology. But there are many individuals who live in poverty.What's more, in many ,places developed
countries
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 are now giving monetary help to developing and underdeveloped
countries
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. In my opinion, rich
countries
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 do not give financial
aid
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 to poor
countries
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.
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, developed
countries
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 should give some other types of help to poor
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. Many arguments are against financial
aid
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 because
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aid
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 has a lot of bad aspects .
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, first of all, financial
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 may not actually reach those for whom it is meant.
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, It may make those people lazy , as they would be getting
aid
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 without doing any work.
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, the
aid
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 may be used for the wrong purposes. The best way to help poor
countries
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 would be to open good educational institutes, good health centres and create job opportunities.These types of help can be more effective and sustainable than financial
aid
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. They can help promote trade and investment ,which can create jobs and boost economic growth.
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, there are many ways of helping to solve poverty in poor
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 than giving monetary help.

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