Write about the following topic: Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Hobbies
have multiple functions in our
lifes
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, like
stress
relief, but work and family life
lead
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to a decrease
of
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time
people can commit to
Hobbies
.
This
is one reason why
stress related
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health issues
is
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on the rise. In the
last
years
time
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the time
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spend
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at work has significantly risen, which leads people to be more tired in the evening. After finishing daily tasks and spending
time
with family or a significant other, a lot of people do not have the energy to devote some
time
to a Hobby. Often, the end of the day is spent in front of the TV or streaming services.
This
time
could be used for
stress
relief by either
excercise
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exercise
or reading, but in my personal
experience
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it is easier to sit
passiv
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passive
passively
in front of a monitor.
This
has serious health implications, as
hobbies
can have
stress reducing
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effects.
Stress related
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diseases, like heart problems, are one of the leading causes of death in our society.
Hobbies
could help to mitigate the effects of
stress
on our hearts significantly,
in addition
to
stress
in our daily
lifes
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lives
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.
Hobbies
therefore
serve an important purpose, not only in our personal
lifes
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lives
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but
also
in our society.
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