Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people think that
music
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a vital role in combining people of different customs and ages from all over the world together. Most
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the
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music
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specialists consider that
music
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is a universal language which has for exchange the intends with each
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. I personally agree with
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viviewpoint
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viewpoint
.
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essay will discuss the possible reasons related to
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viewpoint. The foremost reason is that
according to
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folk
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is an efficient way of bringing individuals who have
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different backgrounds.
In addition
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,
music
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is not the language of a particular country.
Consequently
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, individuals from
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world are able to comprehend the meaning of
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the same
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song through its melody.
For instance
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, K- POP
songs
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are extremely popular and promulgated
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many nations.
Furthermore
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,
music
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can mitigate the gap between people in
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the older
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generation and
younger
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the younger
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generation. It would be clearly seen from
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a number
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of TV shows
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that invited
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for
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former singers to join
with
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the show in
oder
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order
to sing with adolescents.
On the other hand
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,
music
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is responsible for the community from different countries and cultures.
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, there are numerous
music
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schools where students from many regions go to study
such
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as The Bharathi College of
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music
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in
the
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india
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India
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and The London
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of
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music
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in the United Kingdom.
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means that
music
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can bring a lot of individuals into one place.
Besides
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, some
music
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is eternal because some
songs
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never eliminate from
heart
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the heart
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of the
persons
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person
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.
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, there are no age restrictions for listening
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songs
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to songs
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of
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by
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Michael Jackson.
However
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, without considering differences all are amused
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by
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hearing
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that song
those songs
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songs
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. In conclusion,
according to
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aforementioned
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arguments
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I have reached the conclusion that
music
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is a good tool for communication. In my opinion, it has a force to
connected
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the different nations and generations. I recommend that all of them should
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be close
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to the
music
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for
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to
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break the boundaries which have among the countries and
community
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communities
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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