Social media addiction: Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Social
media
addiction has been a controversial topic for a long period of time among people
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all ages.
Although
social
media
platforms
such
as Facebook or Twitter have created many benefits for mankind, they
also
brought some harm that we cannot deny. I totally agree with the statement above; social
media
has a serious negative impact on both individuals and society.
Firstly
, the social
media
addiction phenomenon shows a severe influence in making individuals tend to be isolated, they prefer to stay home and browse networking sites pages rather than human interaction.
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recent research in Egypt says that the vast majority of social
media
users spend their whole time on their social
media
accounts which means they are becoming addicted to
this
more than any time before. If the rate of
this
statistic remains going up, the Egyptian
commuinty
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community
will be in
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great danger.
Scondly
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Secondly
,
this
phenomenon comes with some other risks
such
as pornography addiction or
teenagers
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crimes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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