Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, the
use
of Use synonyms
cars
is still popular in many countries around the world and Use synonyms
this
causes one of the world’s environmental Linking Words
problem
, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
that is
Linking Words
air
Use synonyms
pollution
. There is an opinion that Use synonyms
said
Verb problem
apply
international
Correct your spelling
International Car-free
car-free
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
day
(ICF) helps reduce Capitalize word
Day
air
Use synonyms
pollution
. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I’ll discuss both views and give my opinion about Linking Words
this
assessment.
On the one hand, Linking Words
while
Linking Words
cars
are one of the main causes of Use synonyms
air
Use synonyms
pollution
, the reduction of Use synonyms
cars
on the Use synonyms
car-free
Use synonyms
day
will help reduce the Use synonyms
emissions
it releases on that Use synonyms
day
. Use synonyms
According to
data from the Ministry of Natural Resources and Environment of Vietnam, transportation accounts for 70% of NOx Linking Words
emissions
, 60% of Use synonyms
CO
Use synonyms
emissions
and 20% of PM2.5 Use synonyms
emissions
in big cities. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
car-free
Add an article
the car-free
a car-free
day
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
help
reduce traffic congestion, and Change the verb form
helps
it
helps reduce the amount of CO2 in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
air
. Use synonyms
While
CO2 is the main cause Linking Words
for
climate change, reducing it will help protect the Change preposition
of
air
and Use synonyms
also
the environment. Linking Words
For instance
, the research by Hanoi University of Science and Technology illustrates that, if the number of Linking Words
cars
on the street is reduced by 50%, CO2 Use synonyms
emissions
can be reduced by 20%. Use synonyms
Additionally
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
international
Correct your spelling
International Car-free
car-free
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
day
Capitalize word
Day
also
helps raise awareness of using Linking Words
less
private Correct quantifier usage
fewer
vehicles
. People will Use synonyms
use
public Use synonyms
vehicles
or Use synonyms
Use synonyms
use
bikes to Verb problem
apply
transport
.
Correct pronoun usage
transport themselves
On the other hand
, among the sources of Linking Words
air
Use synonyms
pollution
, automobiles only account for less than 30% Use synonyms
while
the majority is attributed to industrial manufacturing and energy production . So, we must Linking Words
also
reduce the activities from manufacturing, or companies must develop a way to handle Linking Words
emissions
coming from factories. To reduce the gases coming from Use synonyms
vehicles
, the governments should open more lanes for bikes. People Use synonyms
use
Use synonyms
cars
for Use synonyms
its
convenience, so opening bike lanes will help lessen the Correct pronoun usage
apply
use
of Use synonyms
cars
. Another method of transportation alternative to Use synonyms
cars
is using electric Use synonyms
cars
. Use synonyms
According to
data, an electric car can help reduce 4 tons of CO2 Linking Words
emissions
per year compared to a gasoline-powered car.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
I agree that ICF Linking Words
day
will help reduce Use synonyms
air
Use synonyms
pollution
in a short time and raise citizen awareness Use synonyms
in
using private Change preposition
about
vehicles
, Use synonyms
this
method cannot solve the problem completely. The other sources of Linking Words
air
Use synonyms
pollution
, including industrial manufacturing, Use synonyms
is
the main cause of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
air
Use synonyms
pollution
. So I disagree with the opinion aboveUse synonyms
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