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In number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities, Others believe the money should be spend on improving existing public transport. Disscuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The group of individuals in several nations believe that the government essentially
ininvest
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invests
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build
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building
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nnovel
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novel
railtracks
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rail tracks
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 among the urban areas
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 others state that authorities should be priorities for growing
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community
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,
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. On the one hand, there are
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 of reasons
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to
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the first suggestion. The prominent one is the
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very fast, safer and more convenient.
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, they welcome large
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 of passengers without any congestion .
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,
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, which have not effects the environment, are very eco-friendly
travel
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 of comparing with other transportation systems.
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, the travellers, who utilise the train to
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, could
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reach
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the
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any destination without exhaustion.I agree with
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because
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if the authorities pay more attention to
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constructing
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 sak rail lines for faster
trains
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,
then
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 commuters could gain enormous benefits and it is very productive for both humans and
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.
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 methods do paramount
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 to the environment,
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 as
the
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carbon emission is one of the detrimental
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.
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, other remaining transport facilities
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 to
travel
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 on the roads.
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, road
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the
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vehicle crashes during
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 period.
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, drivers have to pay special attention
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the
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speed
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controlling
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number of
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vehicles which use the highways.
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to
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appraisal
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 of
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the united
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 kingdom traffic
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controlling
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 that
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number
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 of vehicle hazards about 90%
have
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happen on the roads than
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in metro
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 transit. Not only that trouble but
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 traffic congestion, which is remaining in the
peaktimes
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peak times
, is an immense issue for employers. In conclusion, there are
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number
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a number
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 of advantages
have
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in
the
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apply
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intercity express
trains
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 more than other public
traveling
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travelling
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 services. In my opinion, the government should give
the
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financial support to build up modern rai tracks among town areas.
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