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Some people say that seeing ancient objects in a musuem can give the public a unique awarness of history.Others say that modern media ,such as films or talks on the internet provide a more effictive way for the public to learn about history Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Museums are the only way by which all
things
 are preserved. A few people believe that enhances their knowledge about
history
while
 seeing old objects in the hall.
Whereas
 others argue that publishing is the best way to learn about past
things
. I would discuss both views with my perception.
Firstly
, In the
museum
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 we can see all kinds of ancient objects, with these objects individuals come to know how their ancients live ,what type of clothes they used to wear and they gain more memory about how they lived without any facilities.
Moreover
,by visiting the gallery humans gain a lot of knowledge on
history
.
Secondly
,In , the building we can see stuff as real and directly , but on television they did not give that much attention to
things
.
Moreover
, In ancient , the foundation we can touch
things
as well as
 can click photos directly without any rules.
On the other hand
, Some people can not visit the library because institutions are not located everywhere.We can find it on TV, the Internet, and Media because these play significant roles nowadays.
However
,All types of old stuff are not available in a single museum,but coming to news here we are able to find a plethora of each and every object
hence
 we can read more information about
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history
,
as a result
, we enhance the knowledge of the past stuff
To conclude
, I would like to reiterate by visiting the ancient galleries to gain awareness of the past practice, the internet and movies are more entertaining to learn.From my ,perspective modern media is the best platform to learn fruitful about
history
.
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