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The use of social media, e.g. Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is undeniable that social
media
 plays a big part in
people
's everyday life.
One
 uses social
media
 in various ways
such
 as contacting, working, and connecting with other
people
. With the benefits of efficiency and convenience, I consider social
media
 usage as the superior channel of
communication
which
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 its advantages
outweighs
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outweigh
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 that of
the
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apply
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traditional offline
communication
. First of all, those online platforms widen
people
's chances in many
aspect
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aspects
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 of their life.
People
 can communicate right away without any conditions, especially when distance is the issue.
Therefore
, there are more
chance
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chances
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 for
one
 to get into his dream university abroad, or meet new friends worldwide.
Moreover
, using social
media
 as a medium
also
enchance
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enhances
 productivity. In
workplace
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the workplace
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,
for instance
, the boss can reduce
employee's
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employees'
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 time for meeting onsite by implementing online
meeting
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meetings
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instead
;
this
 makes employees
have
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more time to work on their responsibilities
instead
 of
stucking
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stuck
sticking
 in traffic on their way to
face-to-face
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a face-to-face
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meeting
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meetings
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.
On the other hand
, the face to face
communication
also
have
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has
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 values that cannot be completely replaced by digital mediums. Lack of
understandings
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understanding
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 and empathy often occur when
one
 communicates mostly via social
media
,
which
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while
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 offline
communication
 doesn’t have
this
 issue much. When
one
 completely
see
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sees
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 other
people
’s expressions and body language,
one
 tends to develop
sense
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a sense
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 of connection and deep understanding.
As a result
, the usage of social
media
 might not be successful in dating. Finding love needs
high
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a high
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 level of intimacy and trusting that only chatting is not enough.
To sum up
, even though social
media
 platforms
has
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have
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 some drawbacks of
less
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fewer
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 connections in romantic relationships, the benefits of online channels still outweigh
its
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their
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 disadvantages. Technology created social
media
 for
people
 to be capable
with
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of
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the
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apply
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globalization
as well as
the
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a
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 borderless world. These developments of online tools helped
one
 to catch up with their chances and conveniences
the
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in the
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 flow of
communication
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • information
  • perspectives
  • maintain
  • genuine
  • miscommunication
  • misunderstandings
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • privacy concerns
  • online security risks
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