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The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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The graph illustrates the
different
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of
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outdoor
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the outdoor
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 and indoor
layout
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layouts
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 of a
health
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centre
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,in 2005 and now.
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health
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the health
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centre
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 has expanded to add new
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room
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rooms
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 and more parking space,and change the way of
main
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the main
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 entrance. Looking
the
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 map in more
details
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detail
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,we can see that
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the physiotheraphy
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physiotheraphy
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physiotherapy
room
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 was the only unchanged
room
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.
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Health
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centre
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 has expanded on the top left side which was used for minor operation
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room
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rooms
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.The space of
office
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the office
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 that was below
minor
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the minor
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 operation
room
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 has been reduced,and
CR3
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the CR3
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room
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 has been removed.The place was used to set up
reception
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the reception
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dest
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desk
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 that was set
on
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centre
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the centre
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 of
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health
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the health
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centre
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 and
next
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the next
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chidren’s
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children’s
 play area was designed next to
reception
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the reception
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 desk.
Main
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 entrance has moved
to
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here from
west
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the west
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 side. The space
oCR1
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 and CR2
has
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reduced
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 and
became
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 CR3 and Cr4
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room
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rooms
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.
Similarly
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,
main
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entrace
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entrance
 was replaced by CR1 and CR2
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room
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rooms
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.Outdoor parking has
became
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become
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 more from 12 to 30 spaces.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, centre, room, cr with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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