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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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In truth, Most
people
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 think that the
countryside
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 is the best place to have a healthy lifestyle But a few
people
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 said that life in the cities brings more benefits for your
health
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. Personally, both have positive things and negative things. Which will be discussed below. For the
city
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, it benefits our
health
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, in the cities, material facilities are better than in the
countryside
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, so
people
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 can use some technology items like some machines that can help
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people
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, who have
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disease, and the nurse can take care of the diseased individual.
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, you have sick but you can buy
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medicians to be well again.
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, their environment is polluted. But in the
countryside
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, the environment is very well and
people
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 have to grow plants and feed animals so it can improve their
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 the material facilities aren’t really good. In my opinion, living in the
city
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 is better than in the
countryside
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the condition and the environmental problem in the
city
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 was improved so
people
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 can improve their
health
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 in the
city
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 very easier practice for good
health
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 is not a big problem in the cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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