The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The three pie charts
illustrates
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the median proportion in typical meals of three kinds of nutrients, all of which be unhealthy if
consum
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consumed
too much.
Overall
,
it is clear that
dinner
meal
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meals
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contain
highest
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the highest
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amount
of
sodium
and saturated fat , the
sancks
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snacks
had
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the higest
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higest
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highest
amount
of added
sugar
,
while
breakfat
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breakfast
meals had the lowest
amount
of these three nutrients. Looking at the charts in more detail, regarding dinner and breakfast, dinner had the highest
amount
of
sodium
and saturated at 43 and 37 %, respectively and only 23 % added
sugar
.
In contrast
, the breakfast meal had
lowest
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amount
of nutrients
sodium
was
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14
per
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cent
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, and the saturated fast
as well as
added
sugar
had the same percentage at 16%. Regarding other meals, lunch had the second proportion of
sodium
and saturated fast was 29 and 26%,
while
lunch have the third added
sugar
at 195. In comparison, the snakes had the highest
amount
of added
sugar
was
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42
per cen
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percent
,
while
it have
lowest
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the lowest
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sudiom
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sodium
studio
at 14%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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