The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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the median proportion in typical meals of three kinds of nutrients, all of which be unhealthy if

consum

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consumed

too much.

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it is clear that

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dinner

meal

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contain

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amount

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sodium

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and saturated fat , the

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snacks

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higest

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highest

amount

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of added

sugar

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while

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breakfat

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breakfast

meals had the lowest

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of these three nutrients. Looking at the charts in more detail, regarding dinner and breakfast, dinner had the highest

amount

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sodium

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and saturated at 43 and 37 %, respectively and only 23 % added

sugar

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, the breakfast meal had

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amount

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of nutrients

sodium

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was

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per

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cent

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, and the saturated fast

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added

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had the same percentage at 16%. Regarding other meals, lunch had the second proportion of

sodium

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and saturated fast was 29 and 26%,

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lunch have the third added

sugar

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at 195. In comparison, the snakes had the highest

amount

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of added

sugar

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was

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per cen

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percent

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it have

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sodium

studio

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sodium, sugar with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

171 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
Lifestyle choices
Healthy eating habits
Dietary recommendations

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s live. To what extend you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that playing games and watching TV programs is beneficial but for others it does not improve mental ability of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree.