Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,more and more cities have been constructed by economy and
development
,
many
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and many
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massive
buildings
have been built. Despite
this
truth, some
people
think that
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government
governments
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should spend the money
to
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on
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improving hospitals and schools On
one
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the one
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hand,
i
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I
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have no doubt that many impressive
building
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buildings
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contribute
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contributes
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to a
city
’s image,
it’s attract
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it attracts
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tourism and they can become the
symbol
of the
city
, the
symbol
of
the
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apply
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heritage or the
symbol
of the
economic
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economy
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.
For example
,
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the Eiffen
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Eiffen
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Eiffel
tower
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is
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a beautiful structure in Paris
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that become
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become
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became
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the
symbol
of
“Eiffel
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the “Eiffel
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tower
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Tower
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of the
line
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stars” in France
attract
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attracts
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six or seven million visitors each year, Eiffel tower
became
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has become
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one of the most visited monuments in the world , another example is Statue of liberty in NewYork,USA or Lincoln memorial in
USA
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the USA
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too.On
other
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the other
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hand
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,
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many large, impressive
building
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buildings
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can create employment opportunities.
Further more
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Furthermore
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,
build
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building
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large and impressive
buildings
play an important role in the
development
of the
city
, skyline views at some
skyscapers
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skyscrapers
can create give a
city
a beautiful and
progessive
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progressive
image, attract many talented
person
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people
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, investors and
bussiness
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business
lead to
the
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apply
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improvement.
Hower
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However
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,
spend
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spending
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money on improving school is important . In
sociallife
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social life
education plays an extremely important role for all countries and
people
in
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at
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all times. In
nowaday’s
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today’s
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knowledge
development
trend, education is considered as the most important policy and measure for social
development
.
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,if schools are not improved, the facilities in that school
would
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will
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be down,
it’s
would be worse than it used to be and
with
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for
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that reason , there will not many talented
persons
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people
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and
it’s
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the effect
an effect
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effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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impressive
buildings
because
to build
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building
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a
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apply
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large, impressive
buildings
need talented designers and architects,
it’s
mean talented
people
.
Similarly
,
spend
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spending
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money on improving hospitals and health care
service
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services
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is important
with
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to
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most
of
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apply
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people
in that
city
. By ensuring
a
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good health for
people
, a
city
can
reduces
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reduce
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dead rate ,
improve
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and improve
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the
overall
quality of life.
Further more
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, that can attract many medical professionals and specialists
lead
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leading
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to the
improve
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improvement
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of healthcare
systeam
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system
systems
. In my opinion,
i
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I
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think both of them
are need
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need
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to
improving
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improve
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because
it’s
help
to
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apply
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the
development
of the
city
and the improvement of
people
’s
life
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lives
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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