Advances in computer technology allow young adults to work from home and children to study at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative change?

Nowadays , technology can support many people in their
life
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lives
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. They can search and collect
imformation
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information
quickly.
Therefore
, many countries encourage young
or
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adults
study
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to study
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or
work
at
home
.So, I will give some reason about it .
Firstly
, currently ,
ahibitants
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inhabitants
buy
computer
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a computer
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is easy to approach and cheaply .
That is
the reason why many biggest
company
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companies
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encourage their staff
work
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to work
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from
home
. It
is
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not only helps adults feel comfortable in their
work
and deadlines
,
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but
also
they can save a lot of time
to drive
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from
home
to
company
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the company
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.
For example
, in
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the Usa
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Usa
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USA
, Amazon is a company which has a large number of
employee
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employees
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working
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work
from
home
.
In
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furthermore
, adults have a lot of
freetime
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free time
to take care of their health and their children.
In addition
, they can spend
their
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apply
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quality time
to teach
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teaching
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their children and they can understand
more
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apply
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their
child
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children
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.
For instance
, In England, after covid-19 pandemic , they
encourage
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their residents can
work
online and offline. ,
Secondly
, children need to go to school because when
youngster
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youngsters
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study at
home
, they
dont
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don't
have
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to face
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face to face
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face-to-face
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with other people .So, they do not have any social skills , and the important
skills
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skill
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is communication skills .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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