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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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People have different views about whether some specialists should remain in the nation where they completed their courses or should be allowed to
work
 in other parts of the world.
This
 essay discusses both viewpoints and explains why I believe they should be free to be employed by other countries. The reasons why they should stay in the country where they finished the training are because of the spending
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 training
program
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 and the workforce issue. The nation spent valuable resources to nurture them, and it could be a huge cost for turning them into a good professional.
For example
, cultivating a doctor is a costly and time-consuming process and
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 up precious medical resources.
Moreover
, those countries may experience
lack
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 of labour force or
talents
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,
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 is a tremendous loss if they leave the state.
For instance
, medical graduates from the UK tend to
work
 abroad, and the health system is
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 a crisis of lacking staff.
However
, they should be free to
work
 abroad because they have the right of determining lives. The governments should not force them to remain in the country
due to
 they have their determinations and life goals. It leads to occupational
unsatisfaction
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 if they
work
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 unpleasant environments and eventually quit the position, which is a kind of
wastage
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.
Furthermore
, other nations may offer better welfare or salary for a job, which means they can get promoted quickly and
high
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 job stability.
Overall
, both sides are supported with good reasons. They should stay in the nation because of the expensive cost of training and
potential
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 lack of workforce.
However
, I consider they should be allowed to
work
 anywhere they wish because they have
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autonomy in determining lifestyle and chasing their career goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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