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Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem.

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With an increasing
population
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 there has been a decline in the quality of
life
as a result
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over-crowding
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overcrowding
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 and pollution in
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urban
areas
 around the
world
.
This
essay
 will discuss the causes of
this
 ascended growth in
population
, namely easier
migration
, and poor rural living
conditions
.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest some solutions, namely strict
immigration
 policies and improving rural living
conditions
.
People
 are migrating to
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well-developed
cities
 faster than ever before.
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,
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opportunities in
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rural
areas
 have been declining
due to
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migration
.
This
 is because the
cities
 are
well developed
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. They have better job opportunities, facilities, housing, and public transport which makes
life
 easier for
people
.
For example
,
people
 from underdeveloped countries like India are moving abroad and to the major
cities
 of India itself for a better
life
 as most of India has rural
areas
 that do not even provide basic public facilities. These are the causes of the increasing growth in the number of
people
to move
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 to major and better
cities
 around the
world
 for a better
life
. Some solutions to mitigate the ever-increasing
population
 in the
cities
 are having strict
immigration
 policies and improving the living
conditions
 of the villages. The
immigration
 policies will help filter out
people
 moving to the
cities
 and only
people
 with high potential will be able to do so.
Furthermore
, by improving the living
conditions
 in the rural
areas
people
 will feel less need to migrate to the major
cities
 around the
world
.
For example
, Australia has a well-planned
immigration
 system which helps
people
 migrate to Australia but at the same
time
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 it
also
 helps the country to boost its economy
as well as
 develop its regional
areas
. In summary, with the problem of the increase in the growth of
population
 in the major
cities
 around the
world
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 it is necessary to protect the environment and balance the
migration
 of
people
.
This
essay
 has discussed how the under-developed regions have forced
people
 to migrate to
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well-developed
cities
.
This
essay
 has
also
 suggested how we can overcome
this
 problem by restricting
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migration
 and improving the
life
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 of the regional
areas
.
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