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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the sources of
UK
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the UK
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 police budget in two time periods (2017 and 2018),
while
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 the pie chart displays the distribution of the money in the same time periods.
Overall
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, the amount of funds from all
catergories
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categories
 (national government, local taxes, and other sources) increased over a year.
Also
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, salaries accounted for the largest segment of the expenditure in both years. In 2017, the British police got 175.5
million
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 from
national
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the national
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 government , which rose to 177.8
million
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 a year later. Local taxes, which
initially
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 contributed to the funds with
the
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a
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 figure of 91.2
million
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, showed a slight increase
by
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of
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 around 11
million
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 in 2018. In terms of the distribution of the money, salaries
consititued
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constituted
constitute
 the most of
expenditure
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the expenditure
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, with
the
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a
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 rate of 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. 17% of total funds were spent on buildings and transport in both years and the rest of
money
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the money
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 was on technology for each year, which composed 8% and 14% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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