Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools, especially at the preschool level. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Hi Louis Today I send you another post about how I went to a
restaurant
for the first
time
. People often think that eating at home is healthier. I completely agreed with
this
point of view until I visited Hey
PeLo
restaurant
. When I started college, cooking took up a lot of my
time
. When the wonderful
time
came, I realized that Hey
PeLo
is the best
restaurant
I
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PeLo
is located in a small alley near my school. During a book-shopping trip across the alley, I accidentally turned into a
restaurant
for lunch. It is decorated in a warm classic style with ocher tones. The wall with plants and dried flowers makes me very comfortable. The
restaurant
has a wall made of glass.
That is
why the store is always filled with warm natural light. All the food and drinks here are delicious and it is
also
reasonably priced for students. I usually visit
this
place 2 to 3 times a week for lunch, to study, or read a book. The hostess and service staff were very kind. After many appearances at the
restaurant
, we got to know each other and became friends. Try to visit
this
restaurant
if you have
time
I really like the way they present
this
dish creatively, so I would highly recommend
this
dish to all my friends and family. It is always a pleasure to enjoy
this
dish at Hey
PeLo
Restaurant
Have a good day
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