The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
process
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by which
sugar
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is produced from
sugar
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cane. The
process
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consists of seven steps
various
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time
length
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, starting
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farming
sugar
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canes and ending
by
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with
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dry
sugar
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ready to use. First , sugarcane is farmed and nourished for a period of 12 to 18 months, which is the longest
step
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in the whole
process
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. Second ,
sugar
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cane
get
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harvested by
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means of two ways , either manually or using specialized vehicles. Third , the harvested
sugar
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cane
go
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through the
step
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of crushing, resulting in
liquid
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a liquid
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form called juice. The fourth
step
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involves purifying the juice through limestone filters. The purified juice now goes through the fifth
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, which put it under extreme heat to allow it to evaporate to get syrup out
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it.
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the syrup is centrifuged to separate
sugar
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crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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. Once that happened the
sugar
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is taken into the
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phase of drying and cooling , which finalise the
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and produce ready-to-use
sugar
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that is
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packed and ready for sale.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, step with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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