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Music plays an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both and give your opinion

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One school of thought holds that music is of extreme importance to life,
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 others believe that it is simply an option for entertainment.
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 essay attempts to shed light on both perspectives before concluding that I am in favour of the former notion. On the one hand, music is generally defined as the art of arranging sound to create some combination of form, harmony, melody, rhythm, or
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 content. With the exception of musical works, there are many forms of entertainment that exist in society from the past to the present, including paintings, sculptures, and poetries. They are all serviced specific goals for individuals.
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, singing reaches people through "listening", helping them to aspire to the invisible beauty of something that cannot be seen but can be felt. Painting comes to people through "looking", which helps them admire the beauty depicted in motionless pictures but contains many mysteries from the authors.
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, it's quite hard to say if it's really simply a form of diversion, or that people themselves have not yet understood its true meaning.
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, there are a host of compelling reasons why I am convinced that it is crucial for singing to play an important role in society. Musical works create motivation to reveal the nature of love within the human inner.
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 is because individuals from the past have learned to apply singing to profound goals, like self-esteem and patriotism.
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, songs were used during the Vietnam War in 1975 to promote patriotism
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 as "Open Arms", "Five Brothers on a Tank" and "Gratitude to Vo Thi Sau". Since
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, these musical works have helped the Vietnamese stand up and gain independence and freedom for their nation.
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, it is certain that music is a historical witness of each historical period, it accompanies each milestone in the history of every country in the world, from difficult situations to prosperous eras. So it's easy to see that every country has its own national anthem to highlight what their country has been through. In conclusion,
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 it is irrefutable that melodies are an option of entertainment to a certain extent, I am convinced that these melodies are indispensable importance something to communities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural tool
  • shared identity
  • cognitive development
  • creativity
  • mental health
  • music therapy
  • chronic pain
  • entertainment value
  • personal escape
  • cultural background
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