Nowadays, many children use smart phones, what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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children
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every aspect of their lives.
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believe that it has significant
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disadvantages
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this
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side
and
negatives
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side
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may develop their culture and public life the main reason provided to support
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the
children
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more than 5 hours. So, it is
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that it will influence
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their phones because some
children
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person and I hope parents will increase their interest in their
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of the pros and cons, I wholeheartedly believe that the
advantages
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children
know how to
use
them.
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