The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of Use synonyms
people
who played different sports in a certain region between 1985 and 2005. Use synonyms
Overall
, Rugby experienced a downtrend during the given Linking Words
period
, Use synonyms
whereas
tennis was the opposite. Linking Words
Although
, even if it experimented with an upward trend, its peaks did not reach rugby’s. Linking Words
On the other hand
, Basketball and Badminton experienced a plateau, being the Linking Words
last
Linking Words
one
the least popular during the given Correct pronoun usage
apply
period
, except for the Use synonyms
last
year which shared the same Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
people
as Use synonyms
rugby’s
.
To start with, rugby was the most popular Change the noun form
rugbys
rugby
sport
from 1985 until 1995 with almost 250 Use synonyms
people
at the beginning of the Use synonyms
period
, and Use synonyms
then
going down to just over 200 in 1990. In 1995 it reached 200 Linking Words
people
, sharing the same rate as tennis. Its downtrend extended until the end of the Use synonyms
period
, in which only were 50 Use synonyms
people
on board by 2005.
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Secondly
, tennis commenced in 1985 with 150 sportspeople, and Linking Words
then
its rate increased significantly in the following years, having around 170 Linking Words
people
in 1990 and 200 in 1995. In the next years, the index of Use synonyms
people
playing Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
sport
slightly increased, going up to over 200 in 2000 and reaching around 210 in 2005.
Use synonyms
Thirdly
, there was basketball, which did not experience many changes over the decades. In 1985 Linking Words
this
Linking Words
sport
was played by 80 Use synonyms
people
approximately, dropping its Use synonyms
number
just a bit in 1990 to under 80. Use synonyms
However
, in 1995 it increased its Linking Words
number
, reaching the same rate as it had in 1985 without any changes until the end of the Use synonyms
period
.
Use synonyms
Finally
, the least popular Linking Words
sport
was Badminton, which had a similar trend to basketball. It started with just over 50 Use synonyms
people
in 1985 and Use synonyms
then
it slightly decreased in 1990 to under 50. Linking Words
However
, in 1995 it reached 50 sportspersons like in 1985, maintaining Linking Words
this
Linking Words
number
until the end of the Use synonyms
period
without modifications.Use synonyms
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