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Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's evolving world, culture and traditions are one of the few things that still provide you with some sort of relief and happiness and native language is one part of it. People have a variety of views about it since Earth is now considered a global village
as well as
languages
 like English hold more importance than local
languages
 A lot of people believe that government should pay more and more attention to preserving native
languages
 as they are part of history
that is
footprint
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a footprint
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 of any country
along with
 that they reflect the cultural diversity of a certain region. Together they both create a meaningful impact and hierarchy of homeland. Contrary to
above-mentioned
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 opinion,there is a massive population that thinks
otherwise
.
According to
 them, spending tax money on
such
 things is not a wise idea and these reserves should be utilised more on common personal welfare that includes health, education, transport etc because of worldwide inflation. They opine that
this
 contracting world needs some major international
languages
 to connect
instead
 of many as it creates a binding force
that is
 way stronger I, personally believe that our minority
languages
 are a part of
beauty
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the beauty
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 and versatility that our country holds. Government should focus more on teaching and improvising them as it is our cultural heritage that needs to be preserved for future generations.
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