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Band 6.5

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: •describe the training course you want to do •explain what the company could do to help you •say how the course will be useful for the job

Dear Sir, I am Mohammadreza Hadavi, a pharmacist in the Drug Design section. I am writing regarding a two-month
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 at Cambridge University, which provides invaluable knowledge. The
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 covers several key areas, particularly the challenges in producing suspensions, and offers the opportunity to gather crucial information to address these issues. I would greatly appreciate your support in allowing me to participate, as I am currently unable to afford the registration fee. I kindly request that the company cover the costs of the
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. One of the most significant parts of the
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 is the biotechnology section, which would enhance the company’s research capabilities in biotechnology-based medicines and improve our position among other drug manufacturers.
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, the knowledge gained could help us develop new drugs and expand our exports overseas. Thank you for considering my request. I am confident that the skills acquired from
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 will be highly beneficial to both my work and the company. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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structure
Break the letter into clear parts. Start with the course, then say how the company can help, then say how the course helps your work.
content
Give exact items the company can do, like pay the fee, give time off, help with travel or offer a plan to use the new skill.
content
Use plain talk to show how the course works for your job and the value to the company. Include some numbers or dates if you can.
strength
Nice and polite tone.
strength
The letter links the course to work goals.
strength
It asks for support clearly.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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