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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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Improvements in the technological field have influenced the
way
 that
people
 prepare
food
. Previously
people
 have spent hours in order to make a meal for their families, but nowadays we can spend only a few minutes cooking. That's why I concur with the idea that it has significantly changed
people
's lives in a better
way
.
Although
 it may influence
people
's
health
 in a negative
way
 because
people
 do not know how often they should order takeaway
food
, microwaves and etc. One of the biggest positive sides of the changes in the cooking field is that
people
 have enough free time for various kinds of leisure activities for improving their skills in different fields. Now, everyone can just order a takeaway and continue to do their job. But, even if someone wants to cook a meal it will be much easier than let's say a century ago,
due to
 different advances in technology. Almost in every ,household there are microwaves, ovens, etc. For
this
 ,reason
people
 are able to do many more useful things rather than cooking.
However
, as I mentioned before these changes can cause harm to
people
, too. As an example, it is scientifically proven that using microwaves for long years on a daily basis can influence a person's
health
 in a negative
way
.
Also
, I would like to mention that
people
 are more likely to have obesity now rather than a century ago. Because nowadays
people
 prefer not to cook their own meals,
therefore
 they consume more sugar and saturated fat. But it does not mean that everyone should give up everything, and start cooking all day long. They can just cook a little bit healthier and more nutritious
food
, and
this
 will affect their
health
 significantly.
To sum up
, changes in the meals that
people
 consume have a huge negative impact on their
health
 because
people
 do not know how to use them.
Hence
, there is more chance that they will die at a younger age. And
this
 means that preparing healthier
food
instead
 of junk
food
 is
way
 better and can prolong
people
's lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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