People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? What measures can you suggest to make it easier?
Most
people
have problems
adjusting to situations
in their lives
and usually
it is hard to cope with new Add a comma
usually,
situations
in their lives
. I think people
should adjust to every recent situations
in their Change to a singular noun
situation
lives
and it is help
them to live easily.
One reason for Change the verb form
helps
this
idea is that new situations
bring experiences for them and I think they should adapt to every situation because when they bring experiences about their lives
and they adapt to fresh situations
they can live easily. For instance
, If someone moves to a new country, city or a
new place for life they should use Correct article usage
apply
facilities
Correct article usage
the facilities
about
that city or place and try to adapt to changes in their Change preposition
of
lives
. As a result
, they should enjoy their new situations
. For example
, they should go out or find friends. Following
this
, when they find friends and go out causes them to be happy and forget about problems
in their lives
and they live easily.
Many people
occasionally do not adapt to new situations
in their lives
. Another point to consider is that,
Remove the comma
apply
people
should think life is a challenge and when they think causes them to adjust to every situation. For example
, If someone starts a new job and thinks should adapt to problems
who works
easily or If someone Change the verb form
work
immigrated
to a country should Correct pronoun usage
who immigrated
tries
to Change the verb form
try
adjusting
Wrong verb form
adjust
with
Change preposition
to
problems
and situations
and when who to adapts
who Verb problem
apply
lives
easily and happily.
In conclusion, many people
think it is difficult to adapt to new situations
in their lives
. I think people
should cope with new situations
, challenges and changes in their lives
and when they try to adjust to problems
they can live easily and cause them to be happy in their lives
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