It would be argued by some that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. In my opinion, however, boys and girls benefit more from mixed schools.

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Education

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is always a topic of interest to many

people

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Learning

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improve efficiency, so choosing

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school

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a school

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is thinking about. Schools have other

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level

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and sometimes have

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programs. Single-

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education

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and multi-

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being

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about. So which schools bring benefits for us more ? Some

people

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think that it is better to single-

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education

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Students

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at single-

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school

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often

study

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well because they are less distracted when studying with

peer

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of the opposite

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. By puberty, most of you begin to develop feelings for

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of the opposite

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or the same

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, but the

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between

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same

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sex

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is still much less.

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have feelings for a

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friends

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opposite

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has quite a lot of influence on studying concentration,

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to bad

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results. My friend used to

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very well, but when she

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learn and determine to

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relationship

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with

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power

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for

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study

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of her decreased a lot.

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to single-gender

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school

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to help

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students

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focus on their studies, it

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helps

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confidence

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themselves because they have to take on all roles without the other gender.

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schools’s

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students

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can

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subjects they like without fear of prejudice.

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, they have more motivation and confidence to develop themselves without fear of judgment. Notwithstanding

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have more benefits,

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believe that when attending

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mixed-

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school

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, they will receive more benefits.

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in multi-gender

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school

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can learn

other's

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personalities. Thereby helping you improve and develop more comprehensively.

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often have assertive and strong thinking but sometimes

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need cautious, meticulous and

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can learn from girls. Female

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are often gentle and timid, but sometimes they need to be strong and brave to overcome difficulties and challenges.

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to be able to learn from each other, attending an

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integrated

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make the learning atmosphere more enjoyable. Studying in

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or all-boys

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sometime

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a bit dull.

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pivotal role is that mixed

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also

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helps to balance psychology through

communication

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environment. Thereby,

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communication skills, essential for the future. With

4.0

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era, communication skills are of great crucial, it makes you do work easier and

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helps connect with

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both at home and abroad.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

382 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people think that the best way to broaden young people’s understanding of the world is to encourage them to travel to other countries. do you agree or disagree?