Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

In the development of
technology
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era, many
teenagers
tend to use most of their
time consuming
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social
media
, which
make
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them more comfortable
to interact
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with others virtually.
This
essay will discuss the main reason why
teenagers
prefer making
friends
online and how
this
problem can be tackled. The development of social
media
makes many
people
can interact with others freely and easily. Most popular social
media
platform
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platforms
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,
such
as Instagram and Facebook, widely used by
teenagers
recently and the
users
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keep growing
until
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now.
This
technology
allow
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allows
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them to meet new
people
online and keep up with the trends
that
is
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happening. The use of social
media
also
promotes many
teenagers
to freely express their best or unique side of personality rather than their real personality outside the cyber world. They might think that they can filter the desired personality they want to make many followers and get
the
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praise from their internet
friends
.
Consquently
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Consequently
,
teenagers
have more confidence to socialise
in
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on
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the internet rather than interact physically with others. From my perspective, the most obvious approach to motivate young
people
to
making
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make
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friends
offline is to
promotes
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physical social
activity
in schools and outside
formal
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the formal
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institution
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institutions
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. In order to make
students
attend more physical
activity
, schools must encourage their
students
to take extracurricular
activity
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activities
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outside
the
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school
time
such
as
sport
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, dance, and many other
activity
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. As
the
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result,
students
will
be
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apply
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join
on
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the
students
' club and
making
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make
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more
friends
offline.
In addition
, the role of the parents will be very helpful to supervise their children in terms of phone usage
time
restriction in the house. Parents can make their own rule and invite their children to family
activity
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activities
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and routines. As
the
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result, children do not
feeling
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lonely and tend to decrease their
time
playing social
media
. In conclusion,
although
there are multiple factors of
teenagers
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teenagers'
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addiction to social
media
, the problem can be tackled by including
teenagers
to
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in
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physical
activity
in school and
home
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at home
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. The role of teachers and parents play an important role to encourage young
people
to interact in real life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital platforms
  • primary means
  • social interaction
  • messaging apps
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • geographic barriers
  • perceived safety
  • control
  • online environments
  • global events
  • COVID-19 pandemic
  • accelerating
  • foster
  • community events
  • educational institutions
  • collaboration
  • guardians
  • pivotal role
  • participation
  • awareness
  • psychological benefits
  • physical benefits
  • in-person interactions
  • public campaigns
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