Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In the development of
technology
era, many Correct article usage
the technology
teenagers
tend to use most of their time consuming
social Add a hyphen
time-consuming
media
, which make
them more comfortable Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
to interact
with others virtually. Change the verb form
interacting
This
essay will discuss the main reason why teenagers
prefer making friends
online and how this
problem can be tackled.
The development of social media
makes many people
can interact with others freely and easily. Most popular social media
platform
, Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
such
as Instagram and Facebook, widely used by teenagers
recently and the users
keep growing Correct quantifier usage
number of users
until
now. Change preposition
apply
This
technology allow
them to meet new Change the verb form
allows
people
online and keep up with the trends that
is
happening. The use of social Change the verb form
are
media
also
promotes many teenagers
to freely express their best or unique side of personality rather than their real personality outside the cyber world. They might think that they can filter the desired personality they want to make many followers and get the
praise from their internet Correct article usage
apply
friends
. Consquently
, Correct your spelling
Consequently
teenagers
have more confidence to socialise in
the internet rather than interact physically with others.
From my perspective, the most obvious approach to motivate young Change preposition
on
people
to making
Change the verb form
make
friends
offline is to promotes
physical social Change the verb
promote
activity
in schools and outside formal
Add an article
the formal
institution
. In order to make Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
students
attend more physical activity
, schools must encourage their students
to take extracurricular activity
outside Fix the agreement mistake
activities
the
school Correct article usage
apply
time
such
as sport
, dance, and many other Fix the agreement mistake
sports
activity
. As Change to a plural noun
activities
the
result, Correct article usage
a
students
will be
join Unnecessary verb
apply
on
the Change preposition
apply
students
' club and making
more Wrong verb form
make
friends
offline. In addition
, the role of the parents will be very helpful to supervise their children in terms of phone usage time
restriction in the house. Parents can make their own rule and invite their children to family activity
and routines. As Fix the agreement mistake
activities
the
result, children do not Correct article usage
a
feeling
lonely and tend to decrease their Change the verb form
feel
time
playing social media
.
In conclusion, although
there are multiple factors of teenagers
addiction to social Change noun form
teenagers'
teenager's
media
, the problem can be tackled by including teenagers
to
physical Change preposition
in
activity
in school and home
. The role of teachers and parents play an important role to encourage young Change preposition
at home
people
to interact in real life.Submitted by sheilaamalia85 on
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