The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.
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The diagrams illustrate the different reasons why African teenagers use their phones for the period of four years (2016-2019).
Overall
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it is clear that
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social media was the main reason for the usage of the phone among young people over the years. To compare,
while
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the two other categories show moderate changes, it is noticeable that there was a dramatic change in the usage of the phone for calls. Regarding the two most prominent proportions in the dataset, social media and email collectively account for approximately three-quarters of the
overall
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phone usage.
Initially
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, social media holds exactly half of the proportion but experiences a slight decline to a mere 2% in 2017.
Subsequently
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, the figures exhibit a gradual upward trend, culminating in a significant 56% by the year's end.
Conversely
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, the proportion of teenagers utilizing their phones for email gradually decreases from 25% to 19% over the given period. Turning attention to the remaining categories, it is notable that a greater inclination is observed among individuals to employ their mobile phones for digital photography rather than making calls. The utilization of digital cameras remains stable at 15% during the initial phase and steadily climb to 20% in 2019.
However
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, the proportion of dial calls experiences a substantial drop, decreasing by half of its initial distribution from 10% to a mere 5% by the conclusion of the analyzed timeframe.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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