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Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extent do you agree?h

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From ancient times, sports play a pivotal role in society and individual's life. Each activity
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 varied level of intensity and
possibility
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 of
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physical
 harm. More and more people are proposing
ban
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of
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 brutal games
while
 some
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otherwise
. I fully disagree to stop
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 of matches
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 television
as well as
 halting international games. I have provided 2
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in
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for
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 my disagreement in detail below. Foremost, watching physical sporting events
such
 as martial
acts
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arts
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 motivate young adults to learn
self defense
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 activities. For
intance
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instance
, In martial arts,
student
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learn
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different
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 form of techniques to prepare for
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circumstance
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 which can't be
posible
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possible
 without the
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reach
 and viewership of television.
Therefore
,
broadcasting
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 of
physcial
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physical
 games should continue.
Secondly
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