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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The given data represent the average temperatures per month and
hours
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 of daylight during a
year
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 in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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,
London
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 has the coldest weather and has the least daytime during the
year
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,
also
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 New
York
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 is going a similar way but, is hotter around the middle of the
year
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 with the most sunlight
while
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Sydney
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 gets warmer temperatures all the
year
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 and has close
hours
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 of daylight compared to New
York
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.
According to
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 the line graph,
London
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 and New
York
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 have similar line patterns, even though New
York
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 has colder winter and warmer summer. Both cities have a peak temperature in the middle of July when
London
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 goes around 24
degrees
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 and New
York
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 is close to 30
degrees
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.
Although
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,
London
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 might have higher weather than New
York
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 in summer. In the meanwhile,
Sydney
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 has the lowest average temperatures that going to touch 15
degrees
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 during the same period. New
York
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 is the coldest city in January and December which is around 5
degrees
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while
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London
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 is close to 10
degrees
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.
On the other hand
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,
Sydney
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 has over 25
degrees
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 during that period. By the look of the annual
hours
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 of sunshine, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 have similar
hours
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 which are 2,535 and 2,473
hours
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 per
year
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 respectively.
However
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,
London
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 has significantly low daylight during the
year
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 at 1,180
hours
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, year, london, york, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • annual sunshine hours
  • temperature fluctuation
  • degrees Celsius/Fahrenheit
  • climatic patterns
  • geographical location
  • seasonal variation
  • meteorological data
  • inhabitants' lifestyle
  • tourism industry
  • seasonal activities
  • thermal comfort
  • climate zone
  • sunlight exposure
  • weather trends
  • correlation
  • biodiversity
  • eco-system
  • temperate climate
  • tropical climate
  • desert climate
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