The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average numbers of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
The given data represent the average temperatures per month and
hours
of daylight during a
year
in
London
, New
York
and
Sydney
.
Overall
,
London
has the coldest weather and has the least daytime during the
year
,
also
New
York
is going a similar way but, is hotter around the middle of the
year
with the most sunlight
while
Sydney
gets warmer temperatures all the
year
and has close
hours
of daylight compared to New
York
.
According to
the line graph,
London
and New
York
have similar line patterns, even though New
York
has colder winter and warmer summer. Both cities have a peak temperature in the middle of July when
London
goes around 24
degrees
and New
York
is close to 30
degrees
.
Although
,
London
might have higher weather than New
York
in summer. In the meanwhile,
Sydney
has the lowest average temperatures that going to touch 15
degrees
during the same period. New
York
is the coldest city in January and December which is around 5
degrees
while
London
is close to 10
degrees
.
On the other hand
,
Sydney
has over 25
degrees
during that period. By the look of the annual
hours
of sunshine, New
York
and
Sydney
have similar
hours
which are 2,535 and 2,473
hours
per
year
respectively.
However
,
London
has significantly low daylight during the
year
at 1,180
hours
.
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  • average monthly temperatures
  • annual sunshine hours
  • temperature fluctuation
  • degrees Celsius/Fahrenheit
  • climatic patterns
  • geographical location
  • seasonal variation
  • meteorological data
  • inhabitants' lifestyle
  • tourism industry
  • seasonal activities
  • thermal comfort
  • climate zone
  • sunlight exposure
  • weather trends
  • correlation
  • biodiversity
  • eco-system
  • temperate climate
  • tropical climate
  • desert climate
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