Some people believe that if people are allowed to buy guns, they will be able to protect themselves and the crime rate can be lower. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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The statement "having a gun makes you safer" is highly debated and opinions vary, some think that it lowers the crime rate

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others believe that having a firearm does not increase one's safety but quite the opposite. In my opinion weapon ownership doesn'

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correlate to an individual's protection. Undoubtedly having a pistol will make a person feel safer, but is

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true?, statistics say no,

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having a cannon doesn'

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increase an individual's safety it does enlarge the risk of revolver-related homicides and suicides, to demonstrate, a 2015 study that used data from the FBI and the CDCP reported that firearm assaults were 6.8 times more common than the states with the most cannons than in the least,

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another investigation from the same date found out that people that had firearms at home were nearly twice as likely to be murdered ,unlike the people who didn'

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have.

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to dilute the declaration "crime disappears when more law-abiding citizens carry weapons", David Hemenway a professor of health policy at Harvard noted that the presence of more firearms doesn'

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stop crime but makes them more violent, “What guns do is make hostile interactions much more deadly,” he said.

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despite guns stopping crimes occasionally, they won'

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make you safer in general and will just increase your chances of getting hurt or killed.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

223 words

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Some people believe that if people are allowed to buy guns, they will be able to protect themselves and the crime rate can be lower. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Fully explain your ideas

school children are becoming far too dependent on computers. this is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. teacher need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all cost and go back to teaching basic study skills. do you agree or disagree?

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