The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

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The map illustrates two potential locations for the building of a new supermarket in Garlsdon It is obvious that S1 is located countryside

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s2 is the centre . Both potential sites are close to the railway and

mainroad

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main road

s1 is located outside the residential area - 12km to the northwest . S1 is

also

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very close to the Holton railway line, so it will be convenient to travel by train for residents of these two areas . But the main drawback of the S1 location is that it is located in the countryside, so people from Brandson will benefit less. S2 is located right in the city

center

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centre

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to the north of the southern industrial zone. The distances from here

Crasdon

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between Crasdon

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and Bransdon are 25km and 16km respectively.

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these two areas are very close to both road and railway lines, only

traveling

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travelling

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by train is the most convenient, because

this

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is where no traffic area

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

ou have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

The number of international conferences in three cities. 1965-2010

Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. It is a positive or negative development?

Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hand gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way? Do you think it is a good trend?