The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.
The map illustrates two potential locations for the building of a new supermarket in Garlsdon It is obvious that S1 is located countryside
whereas
s2 is the centre . Both potential sites are close to the railway and
mainroad
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main road
s1 is located outside the residential area - 12km to the northwest . S1 is
also
very close to the Holton railway line, so it will be convenient to travel by train for residents of these two areas . But the main drawback of the S1 location is that it is located in the countryside, so people from Brandson will benefit less. S2 is located right in the city
center
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to the north of the southern industrial zone. The distances from here
Crasdon
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between Crasdon
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and Bransdon are 25km and 16km respectively.
Although
these two areas are very close to both road and railway lines, only
traveling
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by train is the most convenient, because
this
is where no traffic area
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