Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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global temperatures and health problems had a crucial impact on the relationship with our everyday life
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public institutions started building awareness
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change for the environment. For
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I will discuss why I disagree with the statement above.
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as autonomous from the environment
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, which means that our actions are tightly related to natural events. As a matter of fact,
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research conducted in areas subjected to earthquakes,
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or Japan, noticed that the power of these calamities doubled since the beginning of the
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when governments gave permission to withdraw oil from the soil. Yet, earth shakings would likely increase if members of parliament will keep on permitting
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exploitation on behalf of one country’s development. But how can people prove their actions are still valuable to make a change in
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Day Zero in Mexico was an excellent example of it. In fact, in 2013 Mexico City was about to run out of
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actions are over government policies, and how impactful these could be for the next generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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